Below--an excerpt from The Harvard Business School Application Bible (1998-99 ed.) containing 4 sample answers to Question 4 (The "Change" Essay),  plus: The entire booklet has chapters on each of the seven questions in the Harvard Business School Application for 1998-99.  The Bible is one essay tool available to clients of the Cambridge Essay Service. For information call the Cambridge Essay Service at 617 354-2242.

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THE HARVARD BUSINESS SCHOOL APPLICATION BIBLE  (1998-99 ed.).  HOW TO ANSWER ESSAY QUESTION 4.

~~The Mantra: Change is good but hard to execute.~~

            QUESTION 4:   What specifically have you done to help a group or organization change?
             (300 word limit)

        BACKGROUND:
 

                         MODEL "CHANGE" ESSAY ANSWERS:
 

            CHANGE ESSAY 1--TURNING PROGRAMMERS INTO CONSULTANTS

What specifically have you done to help a group or organization change?
(300 word limit)

 
    Comment: Not a pretty picture at MS, but a classic change essay with great content and adequate execution and analysis. The essay deals with a key change situation: veteran, skilled employees must adapt to an additional function: selling consulting services rather than just products. Reclusive engineering types must start selling themselves, an impossible transition for a substantial minority.   The writer spearheads the change. The set up is adequately described, followed by the  the buzz-word filled analysis (explained our vision, valued feedback, gave credit to resistance, recognized early mistakes, hired experts, showed our commitment to change).  While the analysis is cursory, and repetitive, what gives this essay power is the underlying explosiveness of the situation, a real blood bath (30 percent firings) and for the survivors, a top-down change that nobody really welcomed. What comes through by implication is that the writer is tough, smart, and a natural leader. He is 'compassionate' not so much by nature, but by training.  A perfect HBS type.  He knew what you are supposed to do in such a situation (hold meetings, explain the change, listen to resistance) but that is where the book learning stopped and reality took over.
     All that jazz did not really work--at least it did not work as originally planned. Time for Phase Two: extend the deadline, keep up the 'vision' drill, fire people, and hire replacements.  The detail about out-sourcing the hires and fires, after failing to do it in-house, is powerful and telling. So is last sentence about being committed to change, and showing that commitment. Within the context of this essay, it rings true, and you can almost picture the writer heading the entire two-year operation in a collected, firm, intelligent, by-the-book business-like way.   

    More condensed writing and less repetition could have opened some space to screw in further powerful details, but the big picture comes through, and the situation is compelling.  The writer  touches all the right bases, and  the essay scores high.  
     

  CHANGE ESSAY 2-- SAME SITUATION--TURNING SALESMEN INTO CONSULTANTS-- SEEN FROM THE TRENCHES.